It's interesting the way you have portrayed the Aerith/Cloud relationship. Obviously both of them would have to be very broken if they had made it to the Kingdom Hearts world.
As vaguely disturbing as it is I like Aerith's idea of real death and the way she makes it seem homely and pleasant, like sitting in a rocking chair in Hollow Bastion, knitting socks.
That was the most interesting part of the story for me. You made Aerith into an interesting and sympathetic character who is always just trying to create home around her and to take care of everyone.
But I love most of your characters really. takes her hat off to a master