(#) DrT 2007-02-07
You either skipped a few chapters for have posted a chapter from another story here. The two chapters really don't go together as is. You need to explain the HUGE difference between chapter 2 and canon. I'm not saying it can't be done, just not as you've done it. If you explain it in chapter 3, you needed to have posted it along with chapter 2.
"T"