(#) BenRG 2007-02-09
An interesting little chapter with some more details that make this story more three-dimensional.
I particularly like the developing friendship between Harry and Neville. I think that you have both of them in-character. You also write the side characters well (both original and canon).
You stick by the conventions of the independent!Harry story but avoid being too cliche. This is what makes the story worth reading.
BenRG's Rating: 7/10