Review for She


(#) yamsham 2006-05-15

There's a lot to like about this story. It feels real, as if I'm reading the official backstory of "colossus". You have a way of evoking the mood and the epic theme of the game that's very exciting. In particular, I liked the following paragraph very much:

"The whiteness of the stag for the gleam of her smile. The lunar paleness of the pelt for the milkiness of her skin, satin smooth against his own. Was there any more fitting way of acquiring his little flower than this?? Had a more appropriate trade ever been made??"

I don't think the double question marks are necessary, but minor nitpick aside, that's some good writing.