I like it, you don't see many stories from the prohibition age and its a healthy and fresh change. I like that the main character is also original, as well as his choppy speech. Additionally, I like that she calls him "ducky", it just struck me as interesting. In all, it's interesting and leaves a lot to the imagination, like what's going to happen next.
Good stuff
Author's response
Heh, sorry it's taken so long to figure out how to reply to reviews here. I'm such a newbie sometimes. Anyway, I'm really glad you liked it and thank you! I was doing a lot of research in the 1920s era last semester, so when the idea for this story popped into my head, it just sort of settled in the decade. Trying to incorporate the slang of the era without making it sound forced is a chore though.