Review for Forgotten

Forgotten

(#) InuKag 2006-05-16

There is a lot of verbal confusion within these two chapters... however the ending is cute.. it made me like it. but you might think of perhaps changing a few things in the first chapter to get the reader a bit more interested in what is going on. You should elaborate a few things too... like.. the I remember now part, does she remember everything? did that action bring her memory back? or what?

other than that... its got a good idea behind it. nice.