Review for She


(#) Stealth_Noodle 2006-05-17

Loved it. I agree with the other reviewer that story feels like an official part of the SotC world-- you've done a fantastic job of capturing the spirit of the game. I particularly like the parallel of the hunter accomplishing what was thought to be an impossible task for the sake of his love.

The only things I can pick at are the two instances of double question marks, which I found unnecessary and a bit jarring. The word "flirtatious" broke the mood for me, too; it just didn't seem to fit with the story's tone. Other than that, though, I think the phrasing works well.