Review for The Mistake

The Mistake

(#) CoraLiz 2007-02-22

You are so evil, Gwen.
*She pushed herself away from the wall and moved further into the bathroom. "Right, well I guess I'll take that shower now."

Patrick's eyes glistened with something Ava couldn't quite place. "You do that."

Ava felt her pulse quicken. Giving him a sharp nod she pushed the door shut between them. As soon as she heard that metallic click she let out a breath she didn't even realize she had been holding. Patrick was looking all too sexy again, and if she wasn't careful she'd end up doing something stupid.*

More of this please. And I can't believe you brought in the mob! Is it really them, or is the mob just part of the story to cover up the real killer? You need to update so I can give you a point before it gets all full again.

Author's response

yes, I'm completely tacky with the mob thing, but I really just couldn't help myself... Thanks for the lovely review my dear!