Review for Doom
That was entirely unexpected that I experienced being first disappointed at the ending, then chuckling to myself.
A better "sound" word may make the poem better... "thunk" doesn't seem to gel properly with the other words you've used.
Author's response
Yes, I do think I need a better sound word. Does "thump" sound any better? I'm not sure....well, if any one has any suggestions to replace "thunk," please tell me! ~alloreli