threatened by the bright beams of sunlight that broke through the window like a thief, stealing me away from the tranquility of my alcohol-induced slumber -> Except for the alcohol part, that’s how I felt for the past few weeks. Love the simile.
You have to write a story about Patrick, the cocaine-snorting womanizer, DoJ dude.
when I fail to find her even slightly deserving of Patrick's sudden mood shift I open my mouth -> There’s no one who can dish out compliments like Pan, eh?
I loved how Belle sees (or tries to convince herself) that the movie was the counter weight to all the bad stuff that’s happened to her. And her going to pieces over it just shows how much the past months have really affected her.
At the risk of repeating myself: I’ve never had a better teacher of vocabulary than you. Greg Graffin of Bad Religion should be honored to write a song with you, Crystal…
You describe the emotions of the characters in such a way that it’s impossible not to feel them. It must be a combination of your meticulous attention to details and witchcraft.
Also, damn you! You’ve built up such out-standing characters in the course of this story that it’s not necessary to inform the reader who the I-narrator of the individual parts is. That’s probably the biggest accomplishment you can… um, accomplish (see, I do need vocab training badly) as a writer.
Psyched to see you updated. Love & miss you.
Author's response
i'm full of similies right now. they fly out of my fingers and most of them don't make sense anymore, but i'm glad you enjoyed that one.
i'm in love with your reviews. i've never been a fan of the POV:PETE thing, but i love writing in the I-narrator. i've went through an inner battle with it, and decided i wasn't going to budge. thank you for letting me know i made the right move
i miss you. IM me sometime or something. huggage