Well to say that I am curious now would be putting things very mildly. Bill is dead? Truly dead? Is this a dream? Could be a dream as it started with him going to sleep. If not a dream, where are you planning on taking this? Of course you have many options now available but at the same point. You've completely dropped Luna from this story altogether, and I'm questioning, now that Bill is dead, where that will leave Fleur. Again, just rambling. I do have to say that the self-styled first person thinker of writing doesn't give away much of the story because it only allows you one perception for the story, and having to deal with the reactions of others rather than their motivations.
Geovanni Luciano
Author's response
Well now that chapter 21 is up you should be able to discern some of my motives. This is actually 2nd person, but I do have a 1st person on ffa and ff. I'll post it here sometime. Hope you enjoy.~Jim