In the long silence that follows, Seto can hear himself breaking.
That's an excellent sentence, one that breaks my heart.
And the theme of the lines-- /their mouths intersect in a kiss/-- that's really cool. ^^
Author's response
Squee! Thanks for the feedback. At first I was worried it was too thematic, but then I thought, "Aw, hell, it's a _drabble_."