Review for The Last Time

The Last Time

(#) Chase_the_Cat 2006-05-30

Not bad. Things happened really quickly for my taste, and I would personally have liked more character development. However, since none of these are original characters ANYWAY, it's not that big a deal.
And you really had me captivated. No one was OOC, things happened in an orderly and clear-cut fashion, and I'm DYING to know what happens next! It's really quite good. My only real qualm was the repetitive use of "Dark Oak" in that one paragraph... Other than that, GREAT WRITING! Can't wait for more! ^_~