Humour - yeah that told 'em. We got there with the unnecesary vowels first!
And I love how Petra is totally falling for Patrick even though she seems to know nothing about him. It is totally understandable.
And that Katy girl (based on anyone we know??) actually seems likeable, which is unusual for ex's in FOB fiction. Which makes me think there's some Patrick-at-faultness in their breakup. Uh-oh, that could be trouble!
Your Patrick just makes me melt, though. His adorableness just oozes from this story.
Great work.