I'm really enjoying this story. The point of view bothered me for the first couple of chapters, but now I don't even notice. More than anything else, I like how ignorant Harry is. A close second is the way you've handled Bill's character. Keep up the good work!
Author's response
Glad you were able to get past the unusual pov. Harry doesn't have any life experiences to draw from. Bill's trying to help him understand about living. Jim