Oh yah! Much more descriptive! I could barely find anything wrong with it, exept for the fact that maybe Jay and Theresa wouldn't share their feelings -SO- openly? Especially not in front of CRONUS (Bad Cronus! Bad boy! Destroying the world is not a good thing to do! You keep to destroying your couch cushions (sp?) or you get no evil-god treats for a week!) and all...
But that is much too small to be of much bother! And with the descriptiveness, you can improve it by reading lots of descriptive work. This way you get a good idea of how adjectives and all that rot are laid out to look nice! Overall, a great job and I look forward to your next chapter...PLEASE UPDATE SOON or my Auntie's Doberman will come after you and friendly you to death. (Evil doggy glare)