The story was good. Even though it killed me to read a story about the Ino/Shika relationship. I firmly support the Temari Shikamaru relationship. But the story itself was really well written.
There is just one problem. You rated this story PG-13. And it has the warnigs rape and under-aged sex in in it...it sgould be rated R. And capitalize Shikamaru and Why in your summary.
But other than that you have a real talent for writing.
A piece of advice. For the people who jsut write things that don't help improve you writing (unless it' good of course) Screw them!!! Just a joke!!!
I wish you the best of luck!!!
Hugs and Kisses: Pinkfroggie06