NO!!!!! NO!!!! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!
That is the saddest story I have ever read, exept for one book and that was, well different. You have got serious talent, you ever been told? How's someone supposed to give constructive critism fro something like that? It was so intense! I mean I never say anything unsuitable for a child 8 and under, but I feel inclined to say a really really REALLY rude word right now. That's how good it is.