You've got a really superb story going here. I think it's the first good piece of pokemon fanfic I've seen. I really like what you've done with all of the characters, more the pokemon than the humans. Looking forward to the next update.
Author's response
Yeah, my ten year olds are really agressive nasty little creatures, aren't they? I've always enjoyed doing pokemon personalities more than humans, I'm working on it. And the humans will become nicer once they grow up.
There's several good pieces of pokemon fanfiction on fanfiction.net. Try "Clouded Sky" by Negrek, and "Xanthic Growlithe Contract" by Facia (also the sequel "Xanthic Growlithe Contract: Johto").
Also, Camera_Doesnt_Lie has a wonderful fic up at the moment here on Ficwad: "A Different Breed."
Thank you very much for the review, it made my day.