Umm, can you say amazing?!?!?!
"amazing amazing amazing!!!" Ok, definately possible to say.
So this was SUCH an exciting chapter!!! And I'm SOOOO glad Lola fought back. I was glad for once that someone did. I hate the stories where the guy tries to do something and the girl just cries and says 'no' without any real attempt to save herself. It was good because Brody, while still superior in strength and size, could still be brought down- yet not overly so. What I mean by that is, the opposite didn't happen either- the girl didn't COMPLETELY kick his ass because in most situations that isn't realistic either.
And I love cheese!!! I thought it was just fantastic. Especially the Patrick singing in the end. sigh So perfect, so perfect. Even Joe, Dirty, and Pete leaving so quietly to kick some ass was nice. I mean, I could just imagine it. Brody doesn't stand a chance.
Ok, well take my points, because you deserve them, you fantastic writer you!
Amazing amazing amazing!!!- See, still totally in my vocabulary.
Author's response
I love your vocabulary. I'm trying to keep my characters as realistic as possible. None of that Mary-Sue crap. And the fight scene was hard too because I wanted to make it look like she might not get away, but I certainly didn't want her giving him roundhouse kicks to the face either. And can I say that I love your input? Might I say it's amazing? :)