Right now I'm asking why the HELL I didn't read this sooner. You've got me giggling at every twist and turn.
Honestly, I can picture Ryan pacing around and going all Shakespearean on our asses. God, the Bard is amazing. You did a really great job with the monolougue, as well.
And Brendon. Well, he's just the cutest thing. Bloody hilarious.
I love how you have three main carachters, instead of the standard one, and how you're developing all three personalities. I generally end up with one really expounded upon carachter, and tons of flat ones. You don't seem to have that problem.
Again, you are doing an amazing job with your story, and I'm kicking myself for not reading it WEEKS ago.
Lizzy