Hard to follow, that's all. Try makeing Atlanta and atlanta a bit different...say with the good Atlanta still Atlanta and the evil one Alana, Athena, Amy etc...STILL too many exclamiation marks lying around.
Author's response
Thanks for the advise.=) But it would be very hard to change the character's name once the story is released. i hope you would understand.
Thanks for reviewing anyway, i'm really very grateful.