Brilliant! I can't really describe why, I just liked it a lot (well, I like Sonic and FanFics, so that formular works out)
Don't really have that much criticism for you, except that it's a tad easier to read if you leave a line rather than indent.
Author's response
thank you for your review! I greatly appreciate it!
and I will definately remember that for the next chapter, I saw it afterwards and this was me o.o;;