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52 reviewsIn which Tonks assists Harry with some of his exercises, Harry shops in Diagon Alley, and has a bit of excitement, The trip to Hogwarts is detailed and Harry becomes the first sixteen year old the...
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Harry Potter and the Sun Source
(#) Vanir 2008-11-14
Oh yeah. Might makes right, and the simple diplomatic method made famous by the U.S Marines wins again. "If you don't do things my way, I'll kill you." Simple and effective. Prosperity to Sinanju.
Keep at it. It's occasionally quite ridiculous, but always, always great.
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(#) cmatbmed 2008-11-14
I remember remo from the movie, never read the books. I guess looking them up might be fun.
Very fun story I hope to see more.
Keep up the good work.
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(#) whatareyouevensaying 2008-11-14
Sorry to throw in a review that has nothing at all to do with your work, but I noticed that the story summary lists this one as having 4 chapters, even though there are clearly only 2. Just thought I'd bring it to your attention.Harry Potter and the Sun Source
(#) thekev 2008-11-14
damn all i keep looking for harry to say 'hold my beer an' watch this'
well doneHarry Potter and the Sun Source
(#) BrotherBludgeon 2008-11-14
Screw Harry Stu-ing. What I want to know is what you plan on doing afterwards. After what, you might ask? Well, obviously after Harry wipes the floor with Voldemort and the Death Eaters, that's what.
I mean, seriously. Voldemort might be a challenge. Maybe. But no one else in the organization is going to be more insurmountable than your average speed bump unless you super power them as well.
Of course, if you don't plan on suping up the morsmordre crowd, then this story really isn't about any prophecy-related quest at all. Rather, it'd be about a master of the art in the midst of an antiquated and wholly inefficient society that expects him to embrace them as his own.
If that's the case, I'm much more interested in the interactions with the ensemble cast, even as I'm discovering who survived up to this point. Ginny's gone, but what about Sirius? No mention of Pettigrew so far. Was he the one to revive his master? Tonks doesn't seem all that hung up on Remus at this point, does she? What happened to him?
What I would like to see, no question, is Harry's ultimate boudoir sparring partner. That's right. Who else could he possibly reach the elusive Step 32 with but the lovely quarter Veela Fleur Delacoeur?
Then again, a full-blooded Veela could probably take all 52 Steps.
Something to think about.
Fantastic story, though. Really.Author's response
- After Riddle is dead, Harry returns to Sinanju and his training. He's just there for the job.Harry Potter and the Sun Source
(#) thesteffis 2008-11-14
About your Harry Stu comment - I'd say it doesn't matter if you're crossing his character with that of a pre-existing series... he's still a Gary Stu.
Gary Stus come about when the character is one-sided, ridiculously capable, and, more often than not, entirely unrealistic. That seems to fit the mold of this Harry here.
It's an interesting story, if only for the fact that you didn't go the traditional route to creating a Harry Stu (and, Honks is always good), but lessened by the fact that he seems to be a terribly single-faceted character.Author's response
- However, since he is totally in character for the crossover, he is not a Stu, Gary, Harry, Barry or otherwise...Harry Potter and the Sun Source
(#) thenewestmarauder 2008-11-15
I am loving this story and hopin to see where you're going with his "discussions" with Hermione and his "37 steps" with Tonks. Please continue, it is a truly believable Powerful!Harry, there don't tend to be too many of them.Harry Potter and the Sun Source
(#) xhale 2008-11-15
I'm not sure if he's underpowered, but Sinanju!Harry is actually less lethally violent. The only "Marty Stu" in this is the fact that Chiun or Shiva-boy would have outright killed Draco and Snape at first contact - probably the same with Bella. In the Destroyer books it's always a miracle that the protagonist can ever find the head of the bad guys because he's invariably killing the underlings on sight if they show ANY signs of aggression, before info can be extracted or messages relayed.
I'm SO happy to see a new chapter. Yay!Harry Potter and the Sun Source
(#) daled73 2008-11-15
Let's see if I can contribute a little bit, having been a Destroyer Fam decades before Harry Potter was born in JKRs brain.
First howevre you have one TERRIBLE sentence in this story:
"A sweep of Harry’s right foot twisted the next Death Eater in lines head so that he was looking backwards with a loud wet crack."
This would have been much better constructed with "...the head of the next Death Leater in line..." but if this is you only sin I can't complain (too much).
Anyway I can just see the meeting with Dumb-as-a-door after dinner.
"Excuse me you are all under the mistaken impression that I am here as an underage student, subject to this so-called Headmaster's whims."
(various sputtering from McG, etc, Filius smiling quitely, etc. Poppy reporting that the nothing, even skelegrow will repair Snape's broken bones for some reason, etc.)
"I am here on a business contract with a client, Professor Dumby, here being said client."
"I am a legal adult, and I am not subject to any of your whims or temper tantrums. As Snape found out, I will punish those without thinking twice."
"If I have any more crap from You Professor Dumby, I will invoke clause 32 of the standard Sinanju assassination services contract you signed."
"That is the "Treacherous Client" clause, which will cause us to be paid in full by the Goblins, after which I can assure you, my adopted Father will kill you, over a period of 30 to 40 days, depending on how strong your resources actually are."
"But considering how I already feel about Moldyshorts and his Death Eaters, I will probably wait until after I have killed him before reporting the invocation of Clause 32 to my Father."
"Maybe my Brother will decide it is his place to kill you. Remo likes things with sharp edges. He might decide to see if he can manage to slice 10,342 pieces off your body while you continue to live, going for a new record."
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