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The Homely Smile
5 reviewsEveryone wears a mask at one point in there lives. Some even wear masks to hide not just from others, but from themselves as well.
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Masks we wear
(#) someguy39 2009-01-28
These are great little snippets. Keeping it as is would be great, but it would be interesting to see you build a full-fledged story universe out of the character profiles you've put up so far.
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(#) dennisud 2009-01-28
Not bad and not the best, about average.
Still you got me intrigued about Harry, Hermione, Luna and who? Think that can either be a future chapter, or maybe a separate story.
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(#) grookill 2009-01-28
Good characterization of an unused person in the Potter books, but I think the "sameness" of the writing style makes it hard to clearly identify the character that is telling the story. For a suggestion, try writing the chapter as the person telling the story would write. That means that Hannah's writing style would be different than Susan's. Maybe Hannah doesn't know when to use "me, myself or I". Maybe Hannah is so wrapped up around that all of her comparisons are in relation to her obsession.
I hope that you somehow tie all the chapters into a single story, but if you don't this is an engaging attempt to "grow" little used characters.
If you are taking suggestions, how about doing Lavender? Or even a little known teacher, perhaps Hooch.Masks we wear
(#) Cateagle 2009-01-29
Well, this was a bit different look at Susan Bones and I like the woman we see here. I, for one, would like to see more of her and how she interacts with some of the others in a situation where all can drop their masks and be themselvs (should such arise).
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