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Separation
(#) nalakitty01 2009-10-09
Gotta go to sleep now but I thought I'd say some stuff before I forget it.
Still loving the story and had an "OMG" moment with Sophie lol
Typo: In chapter 9 - Because Ray had not cited and power of attorney, his parents automatically ceded any authority he might have had. ("Cited and power of attorney" sounded funny to me. Is there something wrong or am I just having a blonde moment?)
"Ray, what happened?"
"About three brick walls and an I-beam."
(Another laughed out loud moment. I mean, he's hurt but that line was funny XD Glad he's gettin better :D)Separation
(#) RapunzelK 2010-05-20
XD You're right! Thanks for pointing that out!
fixes
Also, I HAVE posted more. There's about 5 more chapters after the one you most recently reviewed. :}
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