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• You're my what?

  (#) DrT 2009-05-16

  Good ol' dependable Ron! (oh, how he will pay. . . .)

• You're my what?

  (#) Bratling 2009-05-16

  Ummm, didn't this begin at the end of the Triwizard? Shouldn't Harry be going into his fifth year, not his sixth?

• You're my what?

  (#) DJ32 2009-05-16

  Moony & Tonks moving to France? Also I vote that we "see" Ron pay that will be fun. Nice chapter thanks for writing see ya next time.

• You're my what?

  (#) Cateagle 2009-05-16

  -chuckle- Obviously, Ron's still not learned to think before speaking (and learning that'll do a lot to matrue him) and managed to totally sink Albus' efforts (then again, I doubt Albus realizes all the changes that have taken place). I enjoyed the various vignette's here and I have to wonder how Molly's going to respond to Harry being bonded to both Hermione and Gabrielle with Ginny left out "in the cold"? If she had any plans to get Harry's money after matching him and Ginny, it could be amusing to watch her reactions and, if she's intemperate enough, the response to any howler she sends Harry. I rather suspect that both Remus and Tonks may be moving soon to France (imagine Dumbles' reaction if/when Tonks tells him that she's moving 'cause she got a better job offer from the French aurors? Heh, I rather suspect that might even get Madame Bones looking into just WTF is going on here and *that* would not be at all good for Dumbles' schemes.
  
  Bratling, did you notice that fifth year has already passed and the story is now in the summer before sixth year?

• You're my what?

  (#) jabarber69 2009-05-16

  Nice Chapter, that wand thingy with mione was cool and looking forward to gabby's not to mention nymphie's too, hell dont forget harry to make you one either! also just have moony and tonks become french citizens and then they can get married and have all the kids they want!

• You're my what?

  (#) Aelfwine 2009-05-16

  Nice!
  
  The wand-making thing is interesting--using both Harry and Gabrielle's hairs was a nice touch.
  
  I'm not surprised that Ron is still a moron, although I do feel just slightly sorry for Ginny.
  
  Here's hoping Tonks and Remus take French citizenship soon.

• You're my what?

  (#) Cateagle 2009-05-16

  Here's hoping Tonks and Remus take French citizenship and join the team there (one can hope that Dumbles won't find out 'til after the fact). if/when Harry makes a wand for Tonks, I wonder if the core will include hari/fur from Remus?

• You're my what?

  (#) Wolfric 2009-05-16

  Fine chapter. I liked the wand making and the off stage sex, heck, I wouldn't mind some on stage sex. It is interesting to see somebody official fighting on Harry's behalf, usually the aurors are fighting Harry or he is fighting the "bad" guys. Maybe Mm Pomphrey can surgically remove that foot from Ron's throat. Thanks for writing. W.

  Author's response

  There's a reason the sex is off stage.... Basically I can't write the stuff. I've tried and after letting it sit for a week I went back and read it, It stunk.

• You're my what?

  (#) dennisud 2009-05-16

  I feel sorry for Ginny here, being manipulated by both her mom and Dumbles, maybe she can elope with neville or somesuch. as for Remus and Tonks, I see them staying in France til Voldyputts is offed!
  
  The developments with the Trio was good but I suggest getting another author to do separate 'lemon' scenes maybe at a certain Yahoo group!
  
  BTW where is Luna here, she's one of my faves and wondered how her Unique abilities can help here.
  
  dennisud

• You're my what?

  (#) siledubhghlase 2009-05-16

  The plot thickens...
  
  So Ron's stuck his foot in it again. I'd have to say APWB Dumbledore had a lot to do with that. He fills that boy's head with such nonsense.
  
  Ginny's been royally screwed here. She was hoping to hook up with Harry, but got tossed out of France thanks to her brother and Dumbledore. She's going to nail Ron's ass for this, but Molly's going to have her own ass chewed too. I hope she can hook up with someone deserving of her.
  
  What started out as a potential disaster for Nymmy has turned out to be a blessing in disguise. She and Remus may be able to marry in France...and even stay there. That's fantastic. It's time Remus had something wonderful happen to him.
  
  Harry's wandmaking is interesting, to say the least. He's got a hobby and it's turning out to be a useful one. I hope he can craft a nice wand for Tonks and make it better than Ollivander's. It appears he can really customize them. I thought it was interesting that he infused Hermione's with his own blood. I wonder why... Did he do that to Gabby's?
  
  I read in one of your responses that you can't write sex scenes. Don't feel bad--they're not easy to write without sounding silly...or outright disgusting. My suggestion is to try to visualize it, marry it to the best sex you've ever had, and then write it down. But take your time with it. There's love there too. Just imagine what you'd like or like to do and how you'd want your partner to respond. Another good thing to do is use metaphor--I like to use fire references, the abyss, powerful water references. That kind of thing.
  
  Sex scenes don't have to involve the F-bomb or a lot of other foul language. They can be beautiful and erotic without that. Practice a bit off-story until you get it right. You're a good writer, so I expect you'll figure it out.
  
  Good job!
  Sheila

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