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Harry Potter and the fledgling phoenix
(#) mrpietan 2009-07-09
A good update, still on my list of stories to keep track of .. :)Harry Potter and the fledgling phoenix
(#) jabarber69 2009-07-09
WoW, I love the direction this story is going! The lady of hogwarts in his head is really cool! and I'm glad he is friends with neville, hermione, and padma, cause ron bilius weasley is a lazy good for nothing arse!Harry Potter and the fledgling phoenix
(#) Nautilus 2009-07-10
lady hogwarts, whilst very cool does add a huge dynamic to your story... both good and bad... how will she affect harry. should she not be able to control everything taht happens within hogwarts... why has no-one ever mentioned her before... why have there never before been any wards... over the years, has her control and power been suppressed. what is her original purpose (was she to be a guide for the headmasters/mistresses) was she to be a guide for her students... can she tell voldy is in 'her'. or can she feel darkness. does she consider darkness as evil?
like i said. lady hogwarts is very interesting, but this brings with it soo much more. not be mention the phoenix.Author's response
it was a gamble to introduce the castle as a sentient being, however she is a castle, she will have feelings of events but not be able to tell what exactly they are only a location. The subject of darkness is an interesting one that will be addressed as she was built in a time where the dark was a part of everyday life so will that effect her reactions i don't know yet, she won't become some sort of seer for harry, just a guiding figure. She has become diminished over time and this will show in later chapters.Harry Potter and the fledgling phoenix
(#) kimr 2009-07-12
I have not seen many stories with a fully sentient Hogwarts, and less with an intelligent avatar, I have to say this story is shaping up very well. Its intriguing about Flamefire, is he still alive or is he only there in spirit to protect Harry's mind-scape from evil headmasters ;). Also Hogwart's avatar description, with green eyes like his mother? or just coincidence?
I did notice one mistake, you introduced harry as Harry Potter, newly joined Ravenclaw Class of 1992, when it should be 1991. its a small enough mistake that you could ignore itHarry Potter and the fledgling phoenix
(#) jsdailey 2009-07-12
How often do you think you'll be able to update. I'll review each time, if it helps with motivation.
The style is spot on. Harry's character, for what changes in his purpose you made, is consistent with what I'd expect. I imagine most of my questions will be answered in the next chapter, when Harry meets Snape and Flitwick, so I'll save any until then!
Keep up the good work!
jdHarry Potter and the fledgling phoenix
(#) pacratjr1982 2009-12-26
I have to ask a question why is it whenever someone puts Harry into Ravenclaw that part of the password or sole the password is always Riddle? I mean just because the children are intelligent and my like to learn does not mean that they can answer a riddle look at Einstien he could not do basic math yet he created a nuclear bomb. So by making it a riddle is mean and cruel because like I said smart and intelligent does not mean they can answer a Riddle and they would get locked out at night.
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