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Low-Cal Diet
3 reviewsNot too sure what to rate this as. There's a lil' curse word inside (the "A" word); as well as a smidge of violence at the end. If the rating should be higher, lemme know and I'll change it. But an...
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Low-Cal Diet
(#) Ithilwen 2006-04-20
This would be a lot easier to read if you fixed up the formatting. Ficwad seems to have eaten some of your tabs. ...Ficwad needs a tab-free diet!
"Underbelly" is one word, but dark and plastic? Unique.
Do you mean "tapped" or "taped" to her mirror?
I think "fatass" is one word too.
"Its" does not need an apostrophe.
Hmmm... Where to post this indeed. Have you considered Horror? A few foreshadowy tweaks to the earlier portion and it would fit right in. If I were you, I'd allude to the idea that the woman's eating habits kept her body well-padded, but not say what those habits were. This isn't a humor piece, really, though the quirky last line would close it off nicely.Low-Cal Diet
(#) Queenessofmyworld 2006-08-08
um...ok SHE ATE THE GUY????????????!!!!!!!!!!!!! wow ok thats really creepy i might have night mares you know...but actually it was really well written but very creepy...very...creepy.................Author's response
What can I say...I'm a fan of red meat. >)
Glad you enjoyed.Low-Cal Diet
(#) Dirk 2007-09-13
LOL I loved it. The descriptions of the woman were vivid and made me laugh. I have to admit, I didn't see the end coming!
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