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Stay With Me
(#) WhiteClaw 2010-06-09
I like the general idea, but try and get a bit more descriptive, and try and get a plot line going. Like for example;
Joe was just pacing around like he wet himself of something, he kept mumbling and looking paranoid. He seemed to be lost, as he was searching high and low for a pay phone. A roadie told him there was one outside, as he scrambled out side within seconds he popped in the fifty cents, and dialed the number.
"Sweethe-" Joe was cut off by his girlfriend.
"Don't even start with me Joe." She snarled into the phone, as Joe flinched. Steven was lingering by, but Joe didn't seem to notice Steven as then Joe held the phone away from his ear. You could hear Elyssa screaming from where Steven was standing. Oh god. Here we go.
Just try to form something, but I like it nonetheless. Keep it up!
:3Author's response
WHAT THE FUCK?! DON'T TELL ME WHAT TO DO YOU BITCH! Haha, just kidding! Thanks for the tip!Stay With Me
(#) WhiteClaw 2010-06-10
WHAT NO! YOUR THE BITCH stab
haha jk jk, anytime ^^Author's response
Oh no you didn't waves index finger around haha :)
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