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Phoenix Eclipse
(#) Cateagle 2010-04-25
Okay, it looks like Shyamal is going to have to very carefully navigate between several conflicting groups in order to protect his sibs and himself. From what I've seen here, I have to wonder if that was a Death Eater attack on the Potters or if Edward provoked Harry to the point where he made a spontaneous animagus transformation into a large and dangerous big cat. There's still a lot left to fill in, but you're doing a nice job of sketching in the outlines to let the readers get a better feel for what's happening.Author's response
Yeah, Shyamal is fifteen and as they were protected in the Elven kingdom, he isn't like the other cliche Harry's who are so intelligent, they can handle politics at a very young age. I'm trying to keep him in tune with average child development.
Harry didn't know to transform into his Animagus side as he learned that from the Blood Elves.
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(#) ROBERT_1958 2010-09-13
If Shyamal determins that Unbridge or anyone else is going to hurt him or his siblings, Shyamal needs to destory them ASAP.
Author's response
Maybe I should replace the chapters on here with the new revised ones. The chapters 1-12 have all been replaced with the newer versions already but I'm still working on fixing CH13-16.
As for Umbridge, she will be dealt with but probably not by Shyamal. Someone else has got dibs on her.
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