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Chapter Three
1 reviewChapter Three: Hospitals and Hotels. or- Did you say Pinky? Roy and Ariel get Leeni to her son, and Ariel meets a few new people. She doesn't know it yet, but they just might be who she's been loo...
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Far From Over
(#) ilex 2010-05-16
With that, Leeni came out of George’s room, and rushed over to me, hugs me, and starts crying. We go into the ICU waiting room and I sit down with her. Once she’s done, I listen to her retell me everything Roy just said.
Okay, this sentence is a good example of how you have to watch your verb tenses . . you're telling a story - past tense, so the sentence should read "rushed over to me, hugged me and started crying. we went into the ICU waiting room and I sat down with her. Once she was done, I listened to her "
see what I mean . . .
Okay, about the chapter . . I LOVE Pinky . . . do you have an educated doctor saying yous as an inside joke, or have you really picked up the local lingo that firmly?
I am NOT cleaning that pool! HE!HE!HE
Well, I gotta go for a bit, but will get back to this story later, when I get finished the laundry and grocery shopping.
WLYB?
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