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Chapter IV, Part v: Complication
1 reviewHe breathed deeply for a moment, clearing his mind, then continued to communicate with his brother. /I'm sorry. but you have such a short temper . . . really, it's not a big deal. I think I may be ...
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One Hell of an Angel
(#) littleblinkingstar 2010-05-31
- ' Claude listened to - or rather felt - his wordless stream of thought for a while before his twin directed a conscious sentence at him. '
… I'm glad you described this too – a lot of times people portray mind-reading like it's whole sentences all the time… even if a person is just thinking about everything and nothing in particular – and if you do that, you don't form real sentences – I liked that you wrote it like that.
and I found the dream-conversation to be interesting – nice thoughts.
I'm sad that Grey has to leave though…
(((ps.: still reading, but I have no internet atm… hope this will be settled soon, so I don’t have to wait so long in between your updates to download them and review… aaaarrrggghhh)))
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