"One thing I truly knew--knew it in the pit of my stomach, in the center of my bones, knew it from the crown of my head to the soles of my feet, knew it deep inside my empty chest--was how love gav...
I think you should develop the reason why Gerard has hurt her (other than reading her journal). It's all a little blurry to me. Some parts of the story I just don't get. It's not horrible, in the least, just needs some developing. Thats all.
Okay. Thank you for your opinion, I'll try my best to keep from doing that in the future. :}
I love it! I think that maybe you should add more to the whole why Gee has hurt her, and see where you can take their feelings. Just my opinion, but please, please, please keep writing more!
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