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Bullet Proof Heart (Love)
(#) Kid_Vicous 2011-04-05
The dialogue is ever so slightly robotic. Okay, it's very robotic. All that: "Look on the bright side." "What is that." "You are coming to my house today." "Oh. Okay." Do people talk like that? I don't know, just use some adverbs or something. He said angrily. He said sadly. He said saucily. It'll make your characters seem more human.
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