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Saving Harry
(#) Saffron 2006-05-18
how could u leave off like that?!?! keep writing though! i luv it so far! there are some great ideas here! very original! great work, keep it up.Author's response
i'm not...geez...just a little writer's block :)Saving Harry
(#) lilyqueen777 2006-05-19
very exciting...:)Author's response
funny u wrote that the last time???Saving Harry
(#) Ithilwen 2006-05-19
This might work well if you tied it in with what Harry says in the first book, that people on the street seemed to know him.
You could stand to watch your tenses. It's, "if Harry liked Severus." etc.Author's response
he's four...nobody knows him yet!Saving Harry
(#) newdye 2006-06-04
This is a good start.
You might want to make your chapters a little longer.
You should have also made Severus a little more reluntant in going to get Harry.
You need to explain why Severus took the Knight Bus instead of apparating to the nearest apparation point.
There was not enough anger displayed when Severus confronted the Dursleys.
More dialogue is needed.
Why is it that when Albus suggess that Harry needed to be taken from Number 4 that it is Severus (mostly) or Hagrid (or even Dumbledore sometimes) are the ones that pick him up?
There are other teachers at Hogwarts and ex or current order members that could pick him up and take him away.
Good start. Update soon.Author's response
why thank u and i will improve the story
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