- I really liked this - especially the contrast between human and animal emotions, and human and animal pain. The relationship between Remus and Sirius in OoTP always interested me, because it's clear Sirius is crashing for a good part of the novel, and how that affected others in the Order while it was happening isn't something we're given much of a window into - so well done. :)
(#) Cephalanthus 2005-06-05Owie. That was... poignant, really, and frustrating (to the part of me that thrives upon happily-ever-afters) and very smartly done overall. There are so many stories out there where R and S become instant best friends again... it's good to see some exploration of the fact that a helluva lot has happened to each of them, and that changes have been made. Two thumbs up.
Ghaah. I can only imagine this Remus' reaction to the events at the Department of Mysteries...
- Very well written - excellent use of present tense and first-person - and Lupin and Sirius were wonderfully characterised. I'm not much of a fan of ship fics, so although it isn't a flaw in your fic, I'd love to read more Lupin and/or Sirius stuff of yours that focus on the characters instead.
The only real criticism I can think of is that I dislike the use of the word "cock" in what is otherwise a wonderfully subtle and classy piece of writing - maybe implying the deed or using a euphemism would be more effective.
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