(#) FlyingSmoke 2011-05-01Eh, Bee's point of view would be fine. Certainly interesting, that's for sure... But if she's going to see Gerard it might help to have his POV too? I unno, I confuse myself.
You know what Frank's situation is like? If You Could Only See by Tonic. I mean, he's in love with Gerard, though he doesn't even want to admit it to himself. Hmm, I'm guessing wrong song; too early in fiction.
Good Lord, though, you would think Frank would have reacted just a little less than way too panicky. I mean, true, he was just kissed by Gerard, but that does not mean you pull away, scared shocked, and run off without saying anything. Well... Damn. The more I think about it, the more I think he reacted just as anyone else would in that situation. I mean, he reacted like how I would probably... Err, no... Arugh, this is confusing. Okay, okay, I give. You confused me with Frank's reaction. I guess I'm pulling to Gerard's POV for the next chapter.
(#) cup-full-of-blood 2011-05-01omg i wanted to be the first one to review awwww anyway i absouloyly love this and i adre how you portrayed frank and how he reacted was very undertsanding. I susupect that frank will soon enough like gerard and whole lot lol
aww this is just soo good and i don't mind at all if you have a pov in bees
i can't write much even though i could probs tell you so much about al the things i like i have to go to watch a film, i will rate this later :) its so worth it
keep up the good work hehe
p.s. my next chapter of happiness and misery is finally up haha i hope you still think its good enough to read
(#) annabel-lee 2011-05-01Poor Gerard! Frank must have...I hope Bee got there before Gee did something he'd regret. I love the chapter, you did a great job. I'm fine with a chapter from Bee's point of view. I'm sure it'll be great. I just hope Gerard didn't hurt himself because he was so upset. Update soon!
(#) Unicorns-are-real 2011-05-01This was awesomely written! You had the mood, setting and everything right :)
I loved all the similies you used to descrbe the guilt Frank felt. You're really talented at writing! :D I wish I was as good as you!
And yeah it would be good to have Bee's view on all of this and Gerard's too :)
Update soon! I need the next chapter ;)
- Sara xoxo
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