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• Senses

  (#) DMitchell1985 2005-05-23

  I loved this story and the vivid descriptions. Only wish that there was more. Either more chapters, or a nice sized sequel. You have an excellent place to start - mouth-to-mouth. :P

• Senses

  (#) Jeram 2005-05-24

  I like this story - there's a good sense of "arrogance" in the air, mixed with a reasonably well written usage of metaphors and imagery.
  I particularly liked the parallels between Lex and Clark (as in how he would become Superman, flying, etc), but I personally didn't care for the crude wording at the very end.
  But I should warn you, I'm not such a fan of explicit sexual fiction, so if you're okay with that, then it's fine.
  On the other hand, the same feel could perhaps by achieved using a different word, a metaphor perhaps, or more simple: "Lex's tongue and Lex's body".
  As a standalone story, it works just fine - if you want it to be a prologue, I'd suggest expanding it just a little.
  
  Otherwise, good job!

• Senses

  (#) Cyprus 2023-10-02

  Your stories are withered garbage and you're a miscarriage to that killed your parents from your sheer and intense hideous infected blood rotting skin corpselike useless excuse of a body! You should never have made such disgusting hemorrhages!

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