- Aww sweet (no pun intended). I particularly liked the paragraph around the realisation of the change Naruto brought. Before Naruto and After Naruto. That hit the nail on the head in several ways. Also the cautious way Gaara approaches love; I don't see him being massively optimistic, but prudently hopeful sounds like him in this phase of his life.
Constructive crit: avoid the use of 'the red-head', 'the blonde' etc. except for very, very rarely. Names and a few words like 'said' are actually unobtrusive when people read; our eye expects them so they flit over them and they don't feel as repetitive as you'd think when you are actually writing them every two sentence.
(#) darkmistress 2008-03-14I really don't there was much wrong with this fic.
Cute and interesting is what I got from it. It explained things in perspective; just how most people love to read it.
Thanks for sharing it with us.
Author's responseI'm glad you enjoyed it. :D
And you're very welcome for sharing - thank you for reviewing!
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