(#) tortillachip 2011-11-23This is just amazing. This is in no way boring, I think it's really interesting. I like how Gerard blames himself for everything. I'm a huge fan of Gerard like this. Also, the part when Gerard was waiting for Mikey to pick up the phone and between each ring he comes up with all of these "what if" scenarios. I think it was really clever to do that. It made the reader wonder what's going to happen if he picks up the phone. You kind of want to tell Gerard that he's okay now, well sort of anyway, and that he's safe and sound. I also like that Frank is showing Gerard that he cares, without even meaning to. "Now that I know who he is, I can find it quite believable that he’d help out a complete stranger. He always was nice. I never understood why he was regarded as an outcast. I wonder if he still is." I'm always a fan of a caring Frank that wants to save the world, but Gerard, Mikey needs you! You should be happy about that!!! I also really like this line. "I’m coming, Mikey; I’m not about to let you down again." I can imagine Gerard with his eyebrows furrowed in worry and the glasses in his hand and he's on his way. He's going to save him, help him at least a little bit. I am a big fan of Gerard being worried about Mikey. This is very well written, and I always look forward to a new chapter. Your writing is so original and you write in a way where the readers feel what the characters feel. I have a lot of things to say about this, all good, but I had to keep it short. Also, how is your arm?
Author's responseThank you soooo much for such a lovely review! I'm glad that you liked it and didn't find it boring. I am a fan of caring Franks and worried Gerards too, which is probably I always write them like that; I just really like writing about the brother relationship between the Ways. My arm is feeling better, thanks. It's not broken just bruised to the bone and two of my fingers are pretty cut up, so I'm still wearing a splint. Thank you very much for asking, it's very nice of you to care! Thank you soooo much for Reading and taking the time to review! :)
(#) SyraStrange 2011-11-26It made me smile how brotherly Gerard is. Mostly because I'm like that too. Only... Sisterly..? Great chapter! Please continue...
Author's responseThanks! I love stories with brotherly Gerards, they always make me feel all warm and fuzzy inside; which is probably why I almost always write him like that. I'm kinda sisterly too (I've got two four-year-old brothers and a baby sister), so I can see what you mean there! Thank you sooooo much for reviewing! :)
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