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Fate's Cruel if Life's Great
(#) youcanstakemyheart 2011-12-11
shock! gasp! oh! where does mikey go? don't make him get hit by a bus like he wanted to be...you're a great writer. update soon!Author's response
Thank you very much! I'm writing the next chapter now and it should be up later today. Thank you for taking the time to review! :)Fate's Cruel if Life's Great
(#) SyraStrange 2011-12-11
There we go; Frank fucked up. I was so angry for a second, then a little sad, and then full out excited for the next chapter. PLEASE CONTINUE!!!Author's response
Yep, Frank fucked up royally on this one.
I'm writing the next chapter right now and it should hopefully be up tonight.
Thank you very much for taking the time to review! :)Fate's Cruel if Life's Great
(#) Lizzeh 2011-12-12
oh my goodnes Mikey aw oh no
silly Frank. WHHHHYYYYYY AUGH
oh my goodness i am SO EXCITED FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER PLEASE UPDATE SOON I LOVE YOU I HAVE COOKIES FOR YOU :33Author's response
COOKIES!!!!! XD
Ahem... I'm very pleased that you found the chapter exciting!
Thank you very much for taking the time to review! :)Fate's Cruel if Life's Great
(#) tortillachip 2011-12-12
This is more than alright. It's amazing. I know I say this every time, but I'm gonna keep on saying it until you believe it. Or until you forget to write something like that. Or until you just say that you actually like the chapter. Whichever comes first. Anyway, the kiss was so surprising. I did not see that coming. At all. It was very well written, though. It was very descriptive without getting too into it. It had just the right amount of description in it. That part made it seem like nothing could go wrong, but of course Frank knew (or thought) that he shouldn't kiss Mikey, not when he's feeling so down and not at all. I also really like the beginning. This line "To die right now would be perfect, would be absolutely delightful in it’s warming release." was so beautiful and I really liked that while paragraph too. You know Mikey has problems, but these problems go deeper than the issues of a normal teenager. That's why it also really goes with Frank pushing him away. He really needs help and Frank pushing him away doesn't help at all. He already has low self esteem and all that bad stuff, and when Frank pushes him away he automatically assumed it was he was worthless and a freak and ugly. Frank of all people should have known not to do something like that. I hope Mikey doesn't do something stupid. That would just kill me and it'll be awful if at my funeral somebody has to tell all the people sitting there that I died of grief. Mikey dying will definitely bring me grief. Well, great job. I wish I could be as good as you with writing. One can only wish, though.
The beginning and ending were so well written, but there were so many different feelings while reading each one. In the beginning with Mikey going on about how he wanted to die, you felt sad and you kinda wanted to tell him it's not true, but in the end of the story you were shocked and surprised and you wanted to run after him until your legs burned too. Or at least that's what it was like for me. I wanted to yell at Frank for being so stupid.Author's response
Thank you so very much; I'm really, truly glad that you liked this!
I'm not a huge fan of writing kisses, largely because I've never kissed anyone and base the majority of my knowledge on the subject from what I've read in fanfics, so it's a relief that you think I wrote it alright!
I'm sure that you could write heaps better than the crap I come out with if your well-structured, thought-out and amazingly detailed reviews are anything to go by. Don't put yourself down over something that isn't even true. :)
Thank you so indescribably much for taking the time to leave such a kind, detailed review! :)
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