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Note to GotSparkle: You're story is too long! Give me a certain chapter to do, please.
Convict by LoveWistfulDreams:
It's a good start. Not much to say really considering it's really short. You have a couple of spelling and punctuation mistakes, which isn't THAT big of a deal, but yeah I suggest you get a beta. I would have liked to know more about how Gerard escaped though. It's pretty obvious you'll tell us why he was put in jail in the first place in later chapters, but you didn't describe the process of his jail break, also, it would be nice to add a bit more details in some areas. I like it though, and I'll be reading the next update. Overall I'd give it a 7.5/10
Pie by Catscanflyy:
I don't have anything bad to say about your story EXCEPT for one thing. The dialogue thing is driving me CRAY CRAY (idiotic way for saying crazy)
You write it like this, for example:
“She has a point”
I say earning a death glare from my baby brother who I had forgotten wanted to castrate me.
When it should be like this!:
“She has a point,” I say earning a death glare from my baby brother who I had forgotten wanted to castrate me
That's the only thing that really bugged me. other than that, I'm looking forward to an update. :) Overall: 8/10
The Only Hope for Me is You by bloodbunny15
Umm, I didn't like it much. No offense or anything o_o but I didn't like the writing style, there were a lot of spelling mistakes. It was REALLY rushed, the updates are short.....and it was...well, a little boring I'm sorry. It's okay, though. Everyone's fics are a little messy at the beginning, you'll improve, just keep practicing.Overall 2/10
I'm sorry I didn't have enough time to do all the others. It was only a day! I'll finish you guys up in the next one, and for other people who want to submit their stories for me, do it now!
-Poison Ivy
Convict by LoveWistfulDreams:
It's a good start. Not much to say really considering it's really short. You have a couple of spelling and punctuation mistakes, which isn't THAT big of a deal, but yeah I suggest you get a beta. I would have liked to know more about how Gerard escaped though. It's pretty obvious you'll tell us why he was put in jail in the first place in later chapters, but you didn't describe the process of his jail break, also, it would be nice to add a bit more details in some areas. I like it though, and I'll be reading the next update. Overall I'd give it a 7.5/10
Pie by Catscanflyy:
I don't have anything bad to say about your story EXCEPT for one thing. The dialogue thing is driving me CRAY CRAY (idiotic way for saying crazy)
You write it like this, for example:
“She has a point”
I say earning a death glare from my baby brother who I had forgotten wanted to castrate me.
When it should be like this!:
“She has a point,” I say earning a death glare from my baby brother who I had forgotten wanted to castrate me
That's the only thing that really bugged me. other than that, I'm looking forward to an update. :) Overall: 8/10
The Only Hope for Me is You by bloodbunny15
Umm, I didn't like it much. No offense or anything o_o but I didn't like the writing style, there were a lot of spelling mistakes. It was REALLY rushed, the updates are short.....and it was...well, a little boring I'm sorry. It's okay, though. Everyone's fics are a little messy at the beginning, you'll improve, just keep practicing.Overall 2/10
I'm sorry I didn't have enough time to do all the others. It was only a day! I'll finish you guys up in the next one, and for other people who want to submit their stories for me, do it now!
-Poison Ivy
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