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The first part of my comeback chapter. Long conversation with Rookwood and magical training.
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Potter's Resistance 1: Breaking Ties
(#) whatareyouevensaying 2006-07-10
Good story, even though it makes me want to remove my eyes with a spork...lack of spaces between paragraphs makes my head hurt.
I enjoyed your jibes quite a bit, especially those directed at the innovator!Harry crowd. Rookwood is an interesting character. I'm assuming at this point that Harry won't be using him for the ritual, so I guess my question is will he find a different Death Eater, or will he pass on the ritual?
PS - This has nothing to do with this particular chapter, but I liked the fact that you brought Terrence Higgs into the story, even if his jealousy over Tonks makes my skin crawl (I guess I'm too invested in the Harry/Tonks ship...must control myself).Potter's Resistance 1: Breaking Ties
(#) wolfe3 2006-07-13
i like your story,but occasionally you get all caught up with EXACTLY what is going on that i get the feeling you forgot what you were going to write in the first place(see.those of us who speak english only have problems with grammar.so don't feel bad)
have you read stephen king?he's written some very good books.occasionally,he seems to get lost in the story,or just drawing out explanations or conversations.i've spoken with many people who don't like his books for that reason.
sorry for the criticism.even though it is a major one,i want to remind you the story is good.i didn't care for the looong conversation between hp and rookwood much.the phoenix/phoenix's have my interest,as the the book.
what i really like is the snake,and holier than thou dumbledore and the flaming peacock society.
god bless and good luck
,wolfe3
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