- Woah. That was truly amazing. I love the way you interpreted Franks thoughts. It was up and down and kind of funny. I loved it. Mikey is a manipulative little kid. Haha. I loved the first official chapter. That was just great. Update as soon as you can.
Author's responseThank you very much! Mikey is pretty manipulative, isn't he? I'm really relieved that you liked the first official chapter; thanks!
And I'll probably update on Monday or Tuesday at the latest. :)
(#) BulletproofNinja 2012-07-21Whoa, mama! That was kinda intense, Mikey is a fiery little bugger isnt he? I really like this story already, it's really original!
I can't wait for the next chapter, update soon!
Author's responseHe certainly is! Thanks; it's really encouraging to know that you like this so far!
Thanks and I should have the next chapter up by Tuesday at the latest! :D
(#) xXxILoveFrankIeroxXx 2012-07-21Gah, Mikey, Mikey. Him with his attitude and mind reading and ability to force you to do stuff by crying and looking qll innocent with tears and a bright pink unicorn pin....... ANYWAY, enough of my ranting. This chapter was really good! Y9ou write SO WELL. Like, this chapter was prfection. Amazing job, can't wait to read more :D
Author's responseMikey is pretty epic, if a little manipulative.
Thank you very much; I'm super happy that you liked this chapter! :D
(#) youcanstakemyheart 2012-07-21I loved this! I love the entire thing so far! And it was right here waiting for me when I got back from seeing Batman! (the fuck yeah-iest movie of the year, if I do say so myself) Poor Mikey, in need of a hug. Have you decided what the pairing involving him in gonna be yet? Anyway, I'm totally in love with this and I can't wait for more!
Author's responseThank you very much! It's really good to know that you're liking this so far. And the new Batman is the epitome of awesomesauce, is it not?
As for Mikey's pairing, I've got a rough idea of who he'll get with but I am still very open to any suggestions/thoughts you may have on the matter.
Thanks for reviewing! :D
(#) tortillachip 2012-07-21This is a really great chapter! Frank seemed to have a rough day, which was pretty easy to tell just by some girl crying about her pet woodlouse (I thought that was pretty funny), but I thought Mikey's different approaches to trying to get Frank to help was really interesting to read about. It obviously shows that he loves Gerard and wants him back. I also really liked Frank's take on words and how they can really change things. They really can, and now he knows this first hand because of Mikey and how badly he wants to get Gerard help. I think both Frank and Mikey are really interesting and likable characters.
Well, great job and I can't wait to see what happens next!!!
Author's responseThank you very much! I think girls crying over woodlice definitely equates to a rough day (glad you found it funny!), or at least a day that was a little tedious to get through. I'm pleased you found the different approaches interesting as I was kinda worried about my writing getting boring towards the end of this chapter. Words can change things a lot, like they can make someone happy or ruin a person's day, and I guess that's what I was trying to get at there. Words did change things for Frank because it was Mikey saying them; Mikey who badly wants his brother to get help. I'm really pleased that you find the two of them likable, I was a little worried that the way I wrote them would make people not so sure.
Thanks for such a detailed review! :D
(#) KobraBlaze 2012-07-21This is a great story so far. After being introduced to Mikey, we already see how desperate Gerard is and how desperate Mikey is to get Frank to help his brother. The characters personas have been conveyed brilliantly. It is obvious Frank is that teenager that really couldn't care about others but one that doesn't know how easily his mind can be changed. Mikey is a determined, persuasive and caring brother that really loves his brother even though we see his scheming tricks to get Frank to help. The chapter has been written very well an I really enjoyed it. Can't wait for more! :)
Author's responseThank you very much! I'm glad you saw how desperate the two brothers are through Mikey's actions with Frank. I think that Frank tries not to care, but in reality really does and just has to be persuaded of it. Mikey really does love his brother, which is why he was so willing to use those tricks to get Frank to want to help.
Thanks for reviewing! :D
(#) mychemicalpony 2012-07-22I can't wait for the next chapter! I really love the plot, it's so clever and I can't believe that no one has thought of it before (that's a compliment) and oh my god. It's a good sign that I'm just rambling and not making any sense because the story's so good :D The way you describe the feelings and emotions and stuff, that's mighty powerful stuff. I certainly couldn't do it, but then again I'm not really that good anyway XD PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE REALLY SOON OTHERWISE I MIGHT DIE OR SOMETHING
Author's responseI'm writing the next chapter now, so it should either be up tomorrow or by Tuesday at the very latest.
Thank you very much; it's a huge relief to know that you think the plot's alright! I was worried that this was a little boring, especially towards the end, so it's really nice to know that you thought the description worked alright and wasn't just really dull.
Thanks for such a lovely review and I'll try my best to update ASAP! :D
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