(#) ZombieSlayer13x 2012-09-03Hehe I like this so far! I'm going to go out on a limb and assume this is the auditioned story about criminals! I like the beginning.
My only suggestion is the spacing. Maybe hitting enter after each paragraph/phrase (RAWR I can't explain it, you probably know though) so it's not word mush. Ohhhhh...I'm so sorry that probably sounded demanding and/or mean. Sorry. It's just a helpful? suggestion.
I like this so far though, update soon :3
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