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The Lemon Games
(#) LabRat 2014-03-27
Okay, just a bit of constructive criticism...well, my opinions, but still hopefully constructive.
First, unless you've upped the ages, Naruto having a ten inch penis is really pushing the suspension of belief for even fanfiction.
Second, personally, I don't think that was a blowjob. While it may have started that way, it certainly didn't end that way. To me, Tsunami sucking his cock denotes the woman being in complete control of the movements. Now, this is just my personal stance, but once the guy starts thrusting into the girl's mouth, it ceases to be a blowjob, and becomes face/mouth/throat fucking. What Naruto was doing to Tsunade was not a blowjob, but throat fucking and gagging.
The lines about her used pussy being stretched out, and ruining her pussy for another man took away from the scene a bit. It made it feel less like a erotic scene, and more like a cheep eromanga.
Okay, now to the other stuff.
I noticed that one of the requirements for the Rinnegan perk is gained upon him having sex with an Uzumaki. Does that mean Naruto might gain that part after having sex with Karin who we've learned is an Uzumaki? Or what about Tsunade, who we now know was the granddaughter of one born to the clan, and as far as we know, possibly the daughter of one as well based on a similar situation to Mito and Shodai. If so, then it's possible for Naruto to gain the Rinnegan before the Chuunin Exams end, which would certainly be interesting. His chakra is already at 40, Karin or Tsunade could be his Uzumaki sex, unless you're deviating from canon greatly, then Kiba or Neji would be his bloodline defeat, so all that he'd need to do is ask about Nagato. Also, this is just me, but given how powerful the bloodline is, it seems that defeating two bloodline wielders should be a requirement, with Haku's Hyouton being the first.The Lemon Games
(#) ir0nfang 2014-07-27
I've only read the first chapter so far, but i've been playing video games since i was two and this has my complete attention. I can't wait to read more and can't begin to imagine how much better things are going to get for naruto now.The Lemon Games
(#) joenamikaze21 2014-08-05
Hello. I just wanted to ask if you could put this story on wattpad. Also, this is an amazing story.The Lemon Games
(#) petersong952 2014-09-28
That Rage comment though, its not as if sakura has feelings, the author can do what he wants with a character.
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(#) shouldibedoingthis 2015-01-13
really good first chapter i hope to see more. love this fanfic cause it got me on this site and now i publish all my lemons on hear fanfiction.net's a total dick. i hope to see more later on.The Lemon Games
(#) Jyuubi1288 2015-04-28
This is an awesome story you are a very good writer,
Good luck with this & any others you may write.
Looking forward to reading the rest of the story.
Peace & Jah Bless
Ja ne
Jyubi1288
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(#) Leofrost 2015-10-13
Hey man. I was reading a Naruto harem lemon fic on fanfiction.net. Anyways, the story was abandoned and out up for sale(!) So I went on a long and harsh journey, through many a cold winters night. There were a whole bunch of other stories out there, but they were all 'meh' to me. But then I found this one. I his story was so good I actually read it in two nights, and made an account just to follow it and drop some encouragement every now and then. But alas! You seem to have abandoned this as well! Horrible. So I, as a humble reader in treat you to at least finish part one. I was hoping for shippuden as well, but I will be satisfied by only this. So please finish! There are only a few girls left.The Lemon Games
(#) belltaco770 2016-01-05
Good story so far and I can't wait for part 2. Don't let the flamers/haters get to you and keep doing what you're doing. And again can't wait for part 2.
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