- It was pretty good. I think the start was a little off, with Naoto saying swinging the bat was an art form, then going on to say how anyone could do it if they wanted to with a little effort. That's a contradiction - art is by definition something most people can never attain, no matter how they work at it.
After that, it settles down and goes pretty well. A little slow perhaps for some folk, but not bad. I like the mood the writing creates.
(#) jidfurikuri 2007-03-09This is really good...good adaptation of the characters and such....^.^
made me happy!!! http://www.flclw.com/forum/viewtopic.php?t=2005&start=0
go there!!! i didn't write it...but it's really good and kinda remidned me of your fan-fic....just a little....
but this just like completely made my day!!!
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