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• Naruto: The Mercenary

  (#) wolverine9 2013-10-06

  I have to say that this story is giving me very bad flashbacks to VFSnake's style of writing; Naruto making ridiculous requests and killing any village or person that dare deny him as well as Naruto being ungodly arrogant and having absolute control over any female he desires with no objections. The clincher would be if child Naruto was hunted down by village mobs and/or tortured.

  Author's response

  I will admit, it is a bit over done. But it's meant more as a primarily sexual story to get all of the pent up ideas in my head out so that other stories I write on Fanfiction don't end up having such things.
  
  It's also short, it's not intended to be long at all and I'd personally be amazed if this hit ten chapters at all.
  
  Perhaps I'll clean it up someday, but for now, it is what it is.

• Naruto: The Mercenary

  (#) Bikerhead69 2013-10-06

  First time i've ever read something like this...please update ASAP!

• Naruto: The Mercenary

  (#) randumbdave 2013-10-17

  Personally, I find your writing style better than VFSnake, your grammar is more correct, thus putting you above him in writing skill (it would be ironic if you were someone who speaks English as a second language, because Snake is from the USA and his English sucks hairy goat testicles). I only point the above out to let you know that I will continue to avidly read your story as opposed to Snake's stories, which I end up dropping after 3 or so chapters. Ugh, so hard to read his stuff.

• Naruto: The Mercenary

  (#) Wrathchylde 2013-10-25

  You've got my interest. I like a good smut story. As for this not being a long story, I hope the potential I see in it isn't wasted. I think this could compete with your others but I can see it as more of a back-burner story. Either way, I'm going to keep with it.

• Naruto: The Mercenary

  (#) Akuma-Heika 2013-12-11

  Interesting tatoo. Starting at the shoulders and continuing to the back of the thighs.
  
  I thought she only had bar piercings besides the two we know she has in canon? When did her tongue piercing change to a ring?
  
  

• Naruto: The Mercenary

  (#) AJGuardian 2014-04-23

  LOL, Oh, man. So much better. Some people just can not write in their own spoken language. And a certain 'Snake' comes to mind.
  

• Naruto: The Mercenary

  (#) Opfer1982lamm 2014-05-13

  Can't wait for the next Chapter. Hope in the next chapter we can read what he will dicuss in mei's room.
  
  Till next time

• Naruto: The Mercenary

  (#) Darrakk 2015-01-24

  Personally, not a fan of the piercings. They just get in the way, and heck, who wants anything remotely pointy near themselves like that?
  
  Not a fan of the limp either. Between crazy genetic splicing, healing chakra, Kyuubi regeneration, insane levels of skill with transplants, Forbidden Techniques that grant immortality and full body modification by the bucket load... Why the heck would he have to limp? Cursed weapon aside, but there really isn't much of that in-verse and you didn't go into detail. Puppetry technique to manipulate the limb via chakra links/threads etc?
  
  Hope you continue, I'd like to see some life in his angels. Breaking them too much seems a waste.
  
  Please continue this story!
  
  

• Naruto: The Mercenary

  (#) SasukeKZol 2016-04-07

  Wow naruto is more arrogant thsn ever before. Waiting for the next chapter
  

• Naruto: The Mercenary

  (#) vmage2 2016-05-18

  The words "renegaded" and "renegade" should be "reneged" and renege". A renegade is one betrays. Renege means to go back on an agreement.

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