- This is lovely. Well-written InoSaku is thin on the ground, so finding this was a joy. The interplay between the girls was awesome, as was the deft inclusion of Inner Sakura (who I am a sucker for), the action scene was excellent, and the ending made me squee.
(Tonton, you voyeur, you.)
- I liked the whole 'chasing a pig' angle ^__^ The fight was good, and I really liked the way Ino's thoughts sort of circled her feelings for Sakura. She's not pining away, you can feel her obstructing her own feelings to start with.
Concrit: though the fight was pretty good, and I liked the bow/wire jutsu, the whole 'jumped by Sound ninja' was a bit random. What were the Sound nin doing there, not that far from Konoha? Why did they attack the girls, and thus betray their presence? Orochimaru and co work in the shadows. Why did they attack with first one man, then the others? The whole thing feels a bit fabricated to put the girls into the position they end up in. Small details could give that a bit more weight, perhaps.
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